Blurb Writing 101

Blurb Writing 101
Published on: Jun 7, 2015

Ladies and Gentlemen! Honored Guests!

I am preparing to write my book blurb for Dolor and Shadow!

My editor wrote me back and explained to me that I wrote a blurb for the Tales of the Drui series and not for Dolor and Shadow. So I am googling “How to write a book blurb” and I am taking you along for the ride!

Google results for “How to write a book blurb.”

http://www.blurb.com/blog/writing-blurbs-for-novels

Dos
-Reference the genre and central theme
-Create intrigue around the main conflict
-Dive right in and introduce your protagonist
-Keep it short and punchy
-Reference your book-writing or professional status, if it relates to your book.

Don’ts
-Give away any spoilers, no matter how tempted you are
-Give a summary of the first chapter
-Open with “In a world,” or any other overused phrase
-Give everything away
-Say how amazing your book is
-Compare yourself to other writers or your book to other books

Reference the genre and central

Dolor and Shadow is a dark fantasy…central theme…Kallan has to cope with her grief and accept her weakness if she is going to work with her enemy.

Create intrigue around the main conflict

Main conflict? Kallan hates the one man she has to work with while King Olaf and the Dvergar are hunting them.

Dive right in and introduce your protagonist

Kallan, the elven witch and queen of Lorlenalin

Back to Google for more results:

http://www.digitalbookworld.com/2013/4-easy-steps-to-an-irresistable-book-blurb/

Here is the formula:

(1) Situation. Every story has to start somewhere, with some people in some sort of circumstances. Describe them simply here.

(2) Problem. Every story (every interesting one, anyway) has some sort of hitch that either makes that situation untenable or makes change inevitable. This part of the description often starts with the word, “But…” or “However…” or “Until…”

(3) Hopeful possibility. Here’s the potential to overcome the crisis. This “cool thing” or “longshot opportunity” makes your audience want to read your story. Yes, the situation (above) seems doomed by the problem (above). Still, there’s hope because of this new twist. Parts 1, 2, and 3, if concisely written, together create the drama that propels the story.

(4) Mood, tone or spirit of the story. Finally, readers want to know what kind of emotional state they’re going to get into while they’re reading this book. Is it a dark, dystopian tragedy or humorous chick lit cotton candy? This is where you set the tone and clinch the deal, turning browsers into buyers.

(Reading back through…I just realized I ignored “mood” completely. I’m curious to see if I created one subconsciously. Let’s see, shall we?)

Okay… Now it is my turn to try.

When Kallan, the elven witch, queen of Lorlenalin, fails to save her dying father, she vows revenge on the one man she thinks is responsible: Rune, King of Gunir.

However, Kallan’s prejudice quickly clouds her judgement and she fails to see the truth behind her father’s death.

I know what my problem is…I’ve been looking at Tales of the Drui like a bird for so long, that I’m struggling looking at just Dolor and Shadow from the worm’s point of view.

Moving on.

However, when Kallan is abducted and taken to the mountains of Jotunheim, she finds herself with none other, but Rune to help her.

Now Kallan must align herself with the one man she has sworn to kill if she is to survive. While battling their prejudices and each other across the ancient lands of Midgard, Rune and Kallan begin to uncover the truth of Kallan’s past buried beneath a web of lies and the Shadow that haunts them.

Alright…altogether now.

When Kallan, the elven witch, queen of Lorlenalin, fails to save her dying father, she vows revenge on the one man she thinks is responsible: Rune, King of Gunir. However, Kallan’s prejudice quickly clouds her judgement and she fails to see the truth behind her father’s death.

However, when Kallan is abducted and taken to the mountains of Jotunheim, she finds herself with none other, but Rune to help her.

Now Kallan must align herself with the one man she has sworn to kill if she is to survive. While battling their prejudices and each other across the ancient lands of Midgard, Rune and Kallan begin to uncover the truth of Kallan’s past buried beneath a web of lies and the Shadow that haunts them.

Now, I have to edit for redundancies. I hate this part. At least it isn’t a 150,000 word manuscript again 🙂

When Kallan, the elven witch, queen of Lorlenalin, fails to save her dying father, she vows revenge on the one man she thinks is responsible: Rune, King of Gunir. However, Kallan’s prejudice quickly  hatred clouds her judgement and she fails to see   blinds her from the truth behind her father’s death.

However, when Kallan is abducted and taken to the mountains of Jotunheim, she finds herself with none other, but Rune to help her. Now if she is to survive, Kallan must align herself with the one man she has sworn to kill if she is to survive.

While battling their prejudices and each other across the ancient lands of Midgard, Rune and Kallan begin to uncover the truth of Kallan’s past buried beneath a web of lies and the Shadow that haunts them.

One more look with the revision:

When Kallan, the elven witch, queen of Lorlenalin, fails to save her dying father, she vows revenge on the one man she thinks is responsible: Rune, King of Gunir. Kallan’s hatred clouds her judgement and blinds her from the truth behind her father’s death.

However, when Kallan is abducted and taken to the mountains of Jotunheim, she finds herself with none other but Rune to help her. Now, if she is to survive, Kallan must align herself with the one man she has sworn to kill.

While battling their prejudices and each other across the ancient lands of Midgard, Rune and Kallan begin to uncover the truth of Kallan’s past buried beneath a web of lies and the Shadow that haunts them.

And again…

When Kallan, the elven witch, queen of Lorlenalin, fails to save her dying father, she vows revenge on the one man she thinks is responsible: Rune, King of Gunir, and inherits her father’s war. Blinded by hate, Kallan fails to see the usurpers within her own kingdom.

However, when Kallan is abducted and taken to the mountains of Jotunheim, she finds herself with none other but Rune to help her. Now, if she is to survive, Kallan must align herself with the one man she has sworn to kill.

While battling their prejudices and each other across the ancient lands of Midgard, Rune and Kallan begin to uncover the truth of Kallan’s past buried beneath a web of lies and the Shadow that haunts them.

I want to add a little something on the beginning.

When the elven city burns, Kallan, the king’s daughter, is taken to Alfheim while a greater power begins to awaken within the young princess. Desperate to keep the child hidden, her powers are suppressed and her memory erased. But the gods have powers as well and it is only a matter of time before they find the child again.

Yep! That about summarizes things. Let’s combine this and see how it looks…Okay, so I altered the text…a lot!

The elven city burns, and Kallan, the king’s daughter, is taken to Alfheim while a great power begins to awaken within the young princess. Desperate to keep the child hidden, her powers are suppressed and her memory erased. But the gods have powers as well and it is only a matter of time before they find the child again.

When Kallan, the elven witch, queen of Lorlenalin, fails to save her dying father, she vows revenge on the one man she thinks is responsible: Rune, King of Gunir, and inherits her father’s war. However, Kallan’s hatred has blinded her. (I hate this line) While Kallan closes in on Rune, usurpers move in, and Kallan is abducted.

Rune tracks Kallan into the mountains of Jotunheim and there he unlocks a power he must learn to harness. Now, with none other than Rune to save her, Kallan must align herself with the one man she has sworn to kill if she is to survive those who hunt her.

Ugh! So frustrating!

While battling their prejudices and each other across the ancient lands of Midgard, Rune and Kallan begin to uncover the truth of Kallan’s past buried beneath a web of lies and the Shadow that haunts them.

And again! I’m really tempted to just send this to my editor, but I really want to get the majority of the work out before I pass it on to her. Google Thesaurus “power.” Did’t help because it gave me science words and not “superhero” words. Let’s try “Ability.”
Synonyms for ability
noun power to act, perform

capability
capacity
competence
intelligence

qualification
skill
strength
talent

understanding
aptitude
competency
comprehension

dexterity
endowment
facility
faculty

might
potentiality
resourcefulness

The elven city burns, and Kallan, the king’s daughter, is taken to Alfheim while a great power begins to awaken within the young princess. Desperate to keep the child hidden, her abilities are suppressed and her memory erased. But the gods have powers as well and it is only a matter of time before they find the child again.

When Kallan, the elven witch, queen of Lorlenalin, fails to save her dying father, she inherits her father’s war and vows revenge on the one man she thinks is responsible: Rune, King of Gunir. While Kallan closes in on Rune, the gods move in, and Kallan is abducted, but not before a strange shadow is planted within Rune. As Rune tracks Kallan into the mountains of Jotunheim, he begins to unravel the mystery of his own power.

Now, lost to the merciless world of Men, Kallan must form an alliance with the one man she has sworn to kill if she is to survive. While battling their prejudices and each other across the ancient lands of Midgard, Rune and Kallan begin to uncover the truth of Kallan’s past buried beneath a web of lies and the Shadow that haunts them.

Okay…I think…I THINK, this is it. Once more.

The elven city burns, and Kallan, the king’s daughter, is taken to Alfheim while a great power begins to awaken within the young princess. Desperate to keep the child hidden, her abilities are suppressed and her memory erased. But the gods have powers as well, and it is only a matter of time before they find the child again.

When Kallan, the elven witch, queen of Lorlenalin, fails to save her dying father, she inherits her father’s war and vows revenge on the one man she thinks is responsible: Rune, King of Gunir. While Kallan closes in on Rune, the gods move in, Kallan is abducted, and a strange shadow is planted within Rune. While tracking Kallan into the mountains of Jotunheim, Rune begins to unravel the mystery of his own power.

Now, lost to the world of Men, Kallan must form an alliance with the one man she has sworn to kill if she is to survive. While battling their prejudices and each other across the ancient lands of Midgard, Rune and Kallan begin to uncover the truth of Kallan’s past buried beneath a web of lies and the Shadow that haunts them.

“Merciless” was a bit much. Okay! This is what I am sending to my editor!

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